October 18th, 2014 at 04:05pm
~*Co-judge for The Stories Behind Snapchats contest*~
To start off with, I really liked the layout, it was pretty and clear and very nice to look at. I think you're a very talented writer and your words are very flowing and professional and elegant. Some of the paragraphs were very thick, but I really loved Sylvette, I love her character and the way she carried herself and she sounded truly beautiful and adventurous and I liked that. And I really liked the Boy, I thought he was mysterious and intriguing and he just caught the attention of my eye.
I didn't see any mistakes grammatically or in the terms of sentence structure, which is just beautiful for how much you wrote here. Though, the only thing I have to really ask about is how abruptly the last chapter ends? I was confused, unsure you finished it, but I wanted you to have a comment in place because this truly was a beautiful piece. Good luck and keep on writing, dear!
Oh my goodness - I didn't even realize I had posted that! I only meant to save it as a draft. Thank you so much for your comment, it was wonderful to hear your feedback on the story.
Just for off-hand record: this story is by no means finished. This part is only what I have submitted for the contest, but I will definitely be finishing it up in about a month when the other contests that I have submitted for come to completion. Thanks again!