I really like the format of this! I always like when people introduce stories in a unique way and I think the way you chose set your story up well.
I didn't find any mistakes or anything and the chapter flowed really well, so I don't have anything to say in that area.
I'm interested to see where you decide to go with this! There wasn't a whole lot of information in terms of where the plot is gonna go so I think it'll be cool to see what happens once you get further in.
I didn't find any mistakes or anything and the chapter flowed really well, so I don't have anything to say in that area.
I'm interested to see where you decide to go with this! There wasn't a whole lot of information in terms of where the plot is gonna go so I think it'll be cool to see what happens once you get further in.
Nice job!
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