cute story, defs love jealous shawzy! kinda relatable because of all the years i played and all the pranks pulled! loved the exploding paint one, its a bitch to clean up though!
This is by far my favorite chapter so far! First of all, I know you kno how much i love FGL and I'd legit fight Parker just to prove that they are REAL country music!
And OMG!!! That prank Parker and Kane pulled on Saad and Shaw is so unreal! I love how they are still going at it, despite the feelings involved! This is going to get good!!! I can only imagine Kane's kicked-puppy sadness.. I wanna give him a hug too!
And YUSSSSSSS Parker is a surfer! We finally know who she is, let's gooooo!
@ Flyers_girl I'm working! Haha, I was stuck on a part in this chapter for a couple of days and I just figured out where to go! I plan on updating tomorrow night or Saturday :)
Ooooh my God. I came to check your stories out, andajdnaldnladm you make Shaw sound soooo hot. I mean, he's already beautiful, but damn.. I like your Shaw. You did good. I like this a helluva lot!
The summary definitely drew me in, I love it when twitter is involved with fanfictions, so I was like; YES, I NEED TO READ THIS! And I quite enjoyed it. There are some moments where I'm not sure who is in the chapter, or who she's talking about in her head, and the changes between POV's confuse me. I have to go back and reread the paragraph to know that it isn't Parker, but Andrew's POV. lol, I think it's because this is written in first person, so it just throws me off a bit.
I do like the suspense in the first chapter where she's talking to a player, but you don't know who it is until she says his name. I love the jealous that Shawzy had in chapter four! And I just love her relationship with the whole team, and with the wives/girlfriends.
Overall, you have a good thing going with this, it's not --(OH MY GOD, I'MCRYING THANK YOU GOOGLE CHROME FOR SAVING MY COMMENT!! )-- full of unnecessary drama, and it's very heartfelt, which I love so much. I don't handle stories that have a lot of drama well, LOL. I tend to stop reading and look for something else, but no... I'll definitely subscribe!
Keep it up! You might just convert me into a being a blackhawks fan (I'm a die hard Oilers fan.)
You know how I feel about her and Shawzy getting it on, and the flirting OMG i can't take it it is too amusing and cute! And when he got REAL sexual with her. Like yessss I'm totally here for that! Wonder how that's gonna impact on their prank wars...
yess!!!! Tazer singing Wagon Wheel is the realest shit out there, and of course Kane is shouting out embarrassing compliments out to him like the drunkard he is haha! Ohhhhh and the inner monologue of Andrew is also the best! Like that is the best way to show us what is in his head. And lol @ Sharp encouraging him, it's too funny. And I actually really like this chapter, because it kind of gives us a little bit of background and at the same time shows us how these characters function under normal circumstances and its nice to see that before they go pranking each other again.