I absolutely love this story so far. You're so descriptive and detailed that its really enjoyable to read. I think your characters are great too, I like Sage's hot headedness and that she speaks her mind despite the trouble it causes her. Can not wait to read more!!!!
This is an excellently written story! I absolutely love the way you word things; (Ex: "My chest is crushing.") where it doesn't exactly make sense in the English language, but it's worded so perfectly that it makes complete sense to our minds. That's a really rare talent, and it's so amazing to find someone who has it and uses it well. You're an excellent writer, and I can't wait to read more of you work. I hope you continue this one for a long time. It really is spectacular. Best wishes!