Carolina - Comments

You did something nearly impossible, and got me interested in something I really don't usually care to read. Not only that, I really felt something. I didn't see any errors, and the layout was beautiful, and agh, this is amazing. Thank you so much for entering this in my contest :)

This was really well written, and the detail you in created amazing imagery. The flow was good and I didn't spot any mistakes at all... Good job!

First, I must say I love that song. :) I'm going to go and play it on Youtube now because its stuck in my head.
Second, here are some things I think should be fixed BUT don't have to be because very rarely am I right about what needs to be fixed.
What are you waiting for, hell to freeze over?
I think that the coma should be a question mark and hell to freeze over should be a stand alone question.
And thats it because you're an awesome writer!
Anyways, that was gut wrenching. I wanted to cry when Delia left Arin; and when he came back I wanted to cry some more. I'm so glad it had a happy ending.
You did such a great job with this story!

Also, my first through when I entered the actual chapter was literally "OH GOODIE SOME SEXY TIMES!" Im not even joking.

First and foremost, this one-shot is amazing. I’m really glad you came to me and asked to write about this song because it was done well. Writing about Arin, was great, because as the first person to comment, said Arin really doesn’t get a lot of love when it comes to Avenged. He and Johnny both are greatly overlooked. The feelings I felt when I read this, were definitely strong and I could just visualize everything like a movie was happening in my brain. Great writing, I didn’t find any mistakes and you definitely stuck to the prompt through the whole thing. Kudos and great job!

Loved this! I'm glad you chose Arin as there's not enough stories written about him. I loved that they got together in the end because I'm a sucker for a happy ending. xxx