Xanax - Comments

I really love that your writing seems very factual, like you've experienced this or you did your research. It makes it much easier to read something that seems very realistic, you know?

I liked how you had the background information at the beginning of the story before you got into it. I deal with panic attacks a lot so it felt very relatable to me, and I appreciated that we got some background on the character before diving into the story.

Your descriptions in this were really lovely. There wasn't an overly large amount, but it was just enough that the reader is really able to understand what's going on with the character and their state of mind which was really cool to read. I felt like I really knew this person, almost like I was inside their head, and it made it that much more sad to see what they were going through.

You have such a great writing style, it really shines when you're just talking about simple movements or thoughts and I absolutely love reading it. This was a really dark and sad story, but you really captured the way a lot of people feel in a great way.

Lovely job!

So this is familiar territory for me. I lost my sister almost six years ago and went through a long and dark path of drugs, alcohol and nights with strangers that I am glad I don’t remember. The anxious feeling of being alone is something I’ll never forget. I used to get panic attacks if left alone for longer than ten minutes, I would scratch at my face and pull out my hair. I got it because I was alone when they pulled the plug on my sister, or so my therapist says. I’m not really sure as I stopped going once we got onto the topic of my sister. I’m rambling, sorry. Anyway, not a lot has happened other than the explanation of where her anxiety has come from and how she was dealing with it. I’d like to see where this story goes though so I will be subscribing.

This is a very strong and dark story (in a good way) It's interesting, it held me captive throughout my reading, which I find great because I often get distracted, but with your piece I read without pausing. Over all it's a great story and would be interested in more. :)

Hey! So your layout feels very minimalist but it's not really. Even though there are multiple aspects to it (the banner, the side banner things, and the multiple sections of the summary) it all actually works really well together. From the summary quote and chapter titles you get a good sense of what it's going to be about in general, but not anything specific. That's really interesting and draws you in to learn more.

The first chapter is very straight to the point. It's just someone telling their story. You establish a background by mentioning the dead friend and then make her seem shut down, but still human. There isn't much to say on the grammar front. Your writing is very clean, very concise.

The first chapter shows a very clear type of depression. How sad, she says when referring to having her own house. I thought that odd because being a nineteen year old myself, I'm very ready to have my own place. My own form of depression makes me want to be alone, so it was interesting to me to see it take the other side.

The section where she mentions not wanting to see a psychiatrist for fear of it being documented is really relatable. I know I thought that exact thing before getting treatment. And even now, that exact problem comes back to bite me in the ass. This whole thing is very relatable. Not only for anxiety, but I find myself connecting my depression to the situation that she's in.

I really think it's clever that you use the clinical name for Xanax and "Xanax" as titles. It's a small something, but I find myself really enjoying it. This piece is very simple with very little dialogue, but it's strong. It says a lot about what people go through and the state of their minds. I wish you would continue it and give the girl some sort of resolution, but often it's best to leave stories like this unfinished. It makes it stronger somehow.

Very good job. I understood the effect that this was going for and there's not much for me to critique. I would've liked to know more about her past and the tragedy she seems enveloped in or how the outside world views her. She seems like a shut in and that only gives one scene to go off of, but it was very good, well-written, clear.

I don't have anything else to say about it, but good job. It seems like some of this comes from experience and I hope that you, unlike the girl in the story, have reached some sort of resolution. This reminded me of some of my own writings, a lot. :)

I really like this. Your layout, your writing. You should definitely make this a thing; I would read it but, hey, that's just my opinion.