January 12th, 2016 at 07:31pm
My favorite two things about this so far are the worldbuilding and characterization. So, we already know sort of that there are at least two different worlds and there's magic (?) of some sort involved. And--with the dark forces and the moon and whatnot--you've already started to kind of tell us how said magic works, which is something a lot of writers seem to forget. All that, without infodumping.
I don't know yet if the readers are being misled, but I also like the brief glimpse at the characters and what kind of people they are. I'm rooting for Mysta right now, but maybe there'll be a twist of some sort? Because this reads a lot like a prologue. It's really neat, though; I hope you continue.
I can honestly say that this wasn't what I was expecting at all but something so much better. Your words created a vision, like I literally felt as if I was watching this instead of reading it. It was so so so perfect. I can't wait for the next chapter!