Every King Needs a Queen - Comments

@ Scott McCall;
Thank you :)

I really like this story

Thank you:)

I really like this story! I love it!

@ Opie Winston
Thank you very much:)

Let me start off by saying I love the atmosphere you've created here, right off the bat. You've opened it up right in the middle of such an intense scene and I love it.

It's like the beginning of an episode of the show, and it captures my attention and makes me insanely excited for what's going to come next.

Your description is phenomenal as well. I feel as if I am actually looking at the scene; I'm a sucker for great description and you have nailed it.

One thing I will say is that I did notice a few grammar blips, but that's normal.

It is also probably good to double space between each new paragraph, that way the whole page doesn't seem to run together, as this can be distracting and confusing for some readers.

But, aside from this, this is a fantastic start to what sounds like a great story. I've subscribed.