A Little Piece of Happiness - Comments

Hmmm I originally thought Alex's but kinda wondering if it's jack's bc that would certainly make shit complicated.lol can't wait to read more!

I think it's Jack's. Just a plot twist that introduces more conflict i.e Will Alex want to be a father to his best friends baby? Will Jack want to know his daughter?

I've never really read and All Time Low fiction before, and if I had then I didn't really know. Either way this is really good, but I did notice that a few times you said "the male" which was a bit confusing, I think sticking with a name is a bit better for the reader. Instead of "the male went to get ice cream" you could have said "Alex left the room in search for some ice cream." With the texting chapter, I think adding in some description (if that's the right word) would be better. Like what is she doing.

(Texting) and then adding somethung underneath.

She sat on the couch while texting rian, her television was on low while her daughter sat next to her curled into her arms.

Does that make sense? Lol

Also, there were a few errors with the name "ruan" instead of "rian"

But other then that it's really good and I can't wait to see who the actual father is :) keep up the good work.

@ Forgetful-Insomniacs as i've said before (i'm starting to feel like a broken record xD) i can't spill the beans just yet or else everyone will stop reading the story and make me a super sadfaced writing bunny. :'( butttttt, on a positive note, i cannn tell you that your guesses are very logical and totally make sense.

since i can't promise an answer for you via comment, i'll promise the next couple of chapters tonight. (: fair enough? :D

Alright it's Alex I mean it's like a 98.9% chance that it's his and the only other possible place is Jack who's got a 1.1% chance like seriously I'm positive it's Alex

@ avenged angel I can't tell you whether or not the baby is Alex's or not, but I can tell you that within the next five or so chapters, all of the boys will know about her. Not long after that, the boys will find out who's Katelynne's father is. There's about thirty or so chapters in this story, so it won't be crazy long before the truth is revealed. (:

Is it Alex's I mean her daughters middle name is the female Version of Alexander but then again that could just be because their friends I just don't know anymore I need to know please tell me soon!!

@ Forgetful-Insomniacs haha, the thrift shop reference was pretty good, i might ha to snag that and write it into one of the future chapters (: i can't tell you whether it's jack's, zach's or alex's, but i can tell you that it's not rian's<3 and literary torture is my favorite form of love. I don't write it to be mean, i write it for the fun and the adventure<3 i'm glad that you're enjoying it, because the upcoming chapters were even more fun to write than these last few, so i know reading them will be too. (:

@ allxamricnxgirl
Hell yes I am this is fucking awesome (yeah I did just reference thrift shop what's wrong with that) and AAAAAAGH WHAT IT IT'S ZACK FOR FUCKS SAKE IT COULD EVEN BE JACKS AND JUST UUUUGHGH you're torturing me I hope you know that

I really like this.

@ Forgetful-Insomniacs I can't tell you for certain whether you are right or wrong, because it'll give away the surprise. But I can tell you that I will update again soon and give a few more hints, but nothing concrete. Hope you're still enjoying this. (:

Ummmm maybe I've got it due to science(to much sesame street) I'm sorry but I get this feeling that if anyone kids having kids that you know for a fact are someone's it's gotta be Alex just sayin however I leant a little towards Zack

Oh my this seems good well I'm gonna need to read more of this yep I'm subbbing