"Bits of blood and skull smattered..." i don't know if "smattered" is a word you wanted to use here, but it made me giggle. however, the entire sentence as a whole was pretty good. i liked the metaphors used in the first bit about an artist and art... however, the first chapter seemed too busy. too much seemed to be going on for me to keep up. for a first chapter, i was expecting more about how the zombie virus or w/e came to infect the populous. i was also confused as to where the main character(s) were, especially in the first half. i understand you elude to a school, with the mention of uniforms, but i was still perplexed. however, i'm still curious as to where this will lead.
July 25th, 2015 at 10:21pm