February 13th, 2015 at 02:51am
Firstly, the layout is a little bit difficult to read. I don't know if it's a combination of the background and the font colour, but I did have to switch to default to read through. Might be an idea to look at changing it a little?
I think this is such a unique idea! Most new year stories focus on having done something positive and doing something positive and although the resolution that Charlie makes is a positive one, I love that everything about this has a really dark connotation to it! I especially love the way that Charlie describes how she needs to murder, how it's a hobby. It all has this horribly evil vibe to it and I'm already wary of Charlie, even from just reading the two chapters that were up. I have a horrible feeling that she'll snap and do something completely horrific.
I do think that your writing could benefit from a little more description of surroundings and feelings in areas (the first chapter, mainly, it did seem a little dry in parts) but for the most part, this is a pretty awesome piece! I think I noticed a typo at the end of the last chapter; fir me should be for me, unless it's showing a dialect (if that's the case, I apologise).
I think this story has great potential! It's definitely a very unique storyline, a very different way to take the prompt that the contest gave you and your character is really compelling, terrifying and interesting all at the same time. This piece shows character development in massive amounts, which I don't tend to see in many other places any more. Good job!
Firstly, this is such an interesting concept! It's normally resolutions to not eat too much chocolate, or to lose a x amount of weight, but this woman has the resolution of not killing anyone! Oh, I am liking this, especially with how she admits it'll probably be hard.
With the second chapter, how it's only been five days and she's struggling is really interesting and shows how this resolution might not have been as well thought-out as she assumed. Afterall, five days is nothing compared to a full blown year.
"The police think it's a man" - this is such a typical thought, which is why I love writing about female killers because no one ever suspects them. Probably to do with the idea that women can't hurt a fly, but whatevs.
This was interesting and different, and although it was lacking in some description I have to admit, this was actually a really nice read! So thank you for that.