Comic Relief - Comments

@ Fantasy Writer Hina
Good pointers. Thanks!!

@ Sammy-Poo! Thanks so much!

This isn't bad! I noticed a few tiny little mistakes, like a misspelled word or two, but nothing drastic. It drags on just a little bit for my liking, but it was still a good read and you're a good writer. Definitely keep it up.

Also, if you wanted to add a nice layout or whatever here is a list of custom layouts. It makes the stories look nicer and can help with getting readers.

Keep it up!

This first chapter was really nice. But one thing I reccommend doing when slipping flashbacks is to put them into italics. You can italicize the text with the [i*] text here[/i*] (take out the *'s) bb code. You can find more BBcodes in the Knowledge Base. :)