October 19th, 2015 at 06:56pm
You know you're a legend with your descriptions, right? Please tell me you know this.
I love how you start this off with "This silence is unnerving." It's enough to get a good scene going, but then you kind of expand on that and help build the atmosphere up by talking about how it's "swelling" up with that tense sort of air that just drowned out everything. It's freaking brilliant! And now I finally realize that this is about Supernatural.
It's amazing how you've gotten their characters down, by the way. Their silence with one another and the awkwardness of not knowing what to say is just great because I can really imagine this happening in an episode. And you always delve deep into their thoughts, which is something I always really like because it helps them seem more real, and with that said I think you actually summed up Sam's thinking process quite well. With him being the more rational, level-headed brother most of the time, him thinking through all the little details before speaking just sounds like something that has his name written all over it.
And then when Dean speaks and everything feels like it's back to normal, your descriptions just kill me again with their perfection. My favorite has to be about how the conditioning unit is "spitting out a broken song" because WHO THINKS OF SOMETHING THAT GENIUS. I can't with you or your wonderful writing.
But then as Sam grows serious with his apology, my heart kind of breaks at how I envision him talking to Dean. And when Dean replies, it makes everything better because I just know Dean would say something like that to Sam.
I don't know why you don't like it, or are unsure if you do or not. This was great, Victoria!
The simplicity of this just rocks me to the core. How you're so on point with their personalities, with the writing, the description of the room, I'm very impressed.
I appreciate you entering into my candy bowl so I could experience something you've written wonderfully.
A.