July 4th, 2015 at 09:47pm
I love this so much. It's a brilliant idea, having three brief snapshots into a couple's life, and you've written it beautifully. You've given a great idea of how the characters lived together, and the scenes of each chapter are very easy to visulize.
I also love your descriptions, they're lovely, and they flow together very well.
The contrast between each chapter is also amazing, especially the neatness and domesticity of the first chapter compared to the chaos of the second. And the way you reference things in each chapter - the pictures, the smells, the tv - really helps gives a sense of time passing, and helps emphasise the changes. (I like how it's clear what's happened without you directly telling us.)
Thank you so much! The idea was based on a 'show, don't tell' concept by demonstrating the situations through descriptions rather than dialogue. I'm glad you liked it!