The Ultimate Sacrifice - Comments

Thanks for the feedback. Dereck is the cliche stupid bully so that is a compliment for me. The chapters are more interesting than the first one.

Well I've read the first chapter so far and I think it's interesting I can see a lot of people liking this story. I'm no grammar expert so if there are any grammar problems I couldn't find them Derek is like REALLY stupid, like really really stupid and while I'm usually more into fantasy I'm interested to see how this story turns out I kind of reminds me of Degrassi and another story I used to like reading on quzilla.