March 11th, 2015 at 03:27am
. I just published a new chapter, so please chack it out. I would love some suugestions. Once again thanks so much! The Rising - Comments
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Thank you so much for commenting! You're suggestions are really helpful. I just published a new chapter, so please chack it out. I would love some suugestions. Once again thanks so much! March 8th, 2015 at 04:14am
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Oh dear....fainting? XD Hope she is going to be okay. I did notice you changed from past tense to present tense, so just watch out for that. And I was expecting a longer chapter, but I can see why you ended it there. Keep up the good work.
I enjoyed it. March 8th, 2015 at 02:54am -
@ meaning of life
No problem. I'm glad I could help. March 5th, 2015 at 04:29am -
@ Under.An.Eclipse
Thank you so much for commenting! I'll be sure to go through "The Rising" again with you're suggestions in mind. Once again thank you so much March 4th, 2015 at 12:17am -
Interesting idea. This is rather well written. Just a few minor mistakes with commas. I would also suggest that you spread out the descriptions of people a bit more, and put in, if you can, a few details about the scenery.
Besides that, it was good, entertaining, and something different. Keep up the good work. March 3rd, 2015 at 11:31pm
So I see.
The prophecy sounds a bit sing-songy, not that is a bad thing. I think maybe you might want to shorten it though. It is pretty good besides that.
Also, I noticed you misspelled phoenix.
What kind of suggestion would you like?