Sing, Sweet Nightingale - Comments

Okiekokie, you said you wanted my long comment, so here you have it:

The opening of the first chapter, the whole scene between Ricky and Taylor was excellent. While it showed Taylor in a vulnerable situation, it also emphasised just how strong a woman she truly is, and as you read on this only becomes clearer and clearer.

As for Megan's heart break, oh good gracious me, I felt every sharp sting of the words from Kameron. It's such an awful place to be in, and Megan dealt with it so well.

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A new haircut, a diet, new clothes… But those would only change my appearance. I needed something completely different. Something life changing.

This summed up the entire chapter perfectly in just a few words. In fact, it sums up the entire story (so far) perfectly. This is not a story simply about a relationship with members of One Direction, it's a story about moving forward. Making the past the past, re-inventing themselves, moving forward and showing just how strong and incredible these two ladies are, with or without One Direction.

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“Yes, I saw Sophia.”

“And?” he questioned.

“She shot me down, mate. Again.”

I liked this, it was almost like a bit of foreshadowing. Taylor wants to look after Megan after she got shot down, and she goes on to 'look after' Liam when he's not that long ago been shot down by Sophia. Then with Harry being used and Taylor being abused, Megan is looking out for Taylor, and could look out for/care for Harry in a similarish fashion (but y'know, with a lot more nakedness ). They've fallen for the male version of their best friend (sort of).

The general drooling over Australian guys. OH MY GOOD GRACIOUS YES! Infact the entirety of Chapter 3! YES YES YES!

The goat laugh followed by the sassiest of sassy Louis' was just excellent! I may or may not have choked a little while eating breakfast.......

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“Half-naked girls? Wha’ da hell!” we all four heard. I recognized the Irish voice and knew that it had to be Niall from the bar.
We could all hear him running do the door, so Louis pulled it open a bit more for him. He looked at my body before looking at my face, but whenever he did he recognized me. “Wey hey! Megan! What are ye doin’ ‘ere?” Niall pushed past Louis and came straight for me.

This. This has to be one of my favourite parts of the whole story. Don't get me wrong, the rest is excellent, but this was just perfect, adorable and I laughed so hard at this!

Also, what was Harry's jelly bean dream?! I am dying to know! It sounds hilarious!

So I very almost missed this in Chapter Six:

Megan:

“What if they gangbang me?”

Zayn:

“Is she insisting on a gang bang?”

You naughty minx Megan, A gang bang was EXACTLY what you were hoping for!

As for Chapter 7 with Harry vs Bartender.....c'mon Megan, wake up and smell the roses, look at all this sexy lads throwing themselves at your feet! Get your bikini on lady and kill them all with your stunning good looks! Literally, the swim suit is the only thing keeping them alive right now, any more skin and they'd be on their back overwhelmed with your beauty.

I loved the way Taylor came out and took control in Chapter 8 the minute that Harry turned up, then her and Liam in the cupboard, so saucy

The obsession after the One Direction-athon was excellent, and the intimate concert was written so well, you could pretty much feel the chills going down your spine.

I love the relationship between Niall and Megan, but I think she's right to choose Harry, it was too friendly, too relaxed between her and Niall to be anything more. There was a chemistry between Harry and her, although quite WHAT Harry is up to I do not know. He is currently acting like a complete and utter fool mind, and I've a good mind to bop him on the head and tell him so!

I loved that the girls went to surprise them, and the guys reactions were just excellent!

As I was saying, this was excellent, one of the best I've read in a while, so pleased to have found it! Looking forward to chapter 11!

Ahhhh I love this story and the writing is fantastic. The characters are so easy to relate to. But what is going on with Harry?! C'mon dude, you've got a great girl head over heels for you, dont be such an idiot. Y'know what they say about diamonds and rocks!

I've read this entire story so far in under 24 hours and theres so much I could highlight (the goat noise, sassy Louis, adorable Niall, the kitchen scene, the closet scene........basically the entire story!) But I will not bore you with it all and a ridiculously long comment. Just know I love it and am looking forward to the next update!

@ louis tommo.
Thanks so, so much!

THIS STORY IS FABULOUIS (did I seriously just say that? Good one -.-) PLEASE UPDATE SOON! :3

Liam waving at her while jogging. Too freaking cute.

OH MY GOD SHE THOUGHT THE SOUND WAS A GOAT

did liam just sit there watching her surf for half an hour i mean it’s cute but also damn liam at least pretend to be cool and non-stalkerish about it jesus h nandos

SHE THOUGHT IT WAS A GOAT, MAN, OH GOOD LORD

tshe thought it was a goat

I’m going to dream of goats tonight, I just know it. I blame you entierly.

Uh oh, my spelling is going down the tube, I can feel it.

Yeah, this must be the longest comment ever. I deeply apologize.

Uhm… what else…

OH. OH YEAH. BY THE WAY. SASSY. FREAKING. LOUIS. SASSY LOU HAS MADE A TRUE COMEBACK, MY FRIENDS. HOLY HELL. HAVEN’T SEEN HIM THAT SASSY IN A LONG TIME. HOLY JESUS. ALSO LOVE THE ACKNOWLEDGEMENT THAT LOUIS RUNS THIS SHIT. THAT WAS A NICE REFRESHING CHANGE FROM THE IDIOT, GIGGLY FOOL LOU THAT PEOPLE HAVE BEEN WRITING AS OF LATE. THAT’S ANNOYING.

lol whut

ANYWAY

sassy louis is absolute gold in this my god

harRY HARRY AHARYRY HAS ARRIVE D FOR A WHILE I THOUGHT THIS WAS A LIAM AND NIALL FIC, I MEAN I LOVE NIALL AND ALL BUT YA KNOW KIND OF INTO HARRY A BIT SO YEAH THAT WAS A NICE SHOCK THERE, OH GOD MEGAN GIRL I SHIP YOU WITH HIM IS THAT WEIRD PROBABLY BUT YKNOW I HOPE YOU GET THE BOY OH GOLLY i’m so sorry i honestly am so out of it right now

the point is I’m excited for Megan and Harry. I think they would be so freaking cute.

THE BOYSALL SAYING “FATEFUL BEST FRIEND” IN UNISON. I NEARLY CHOKED ON MY CHEERIOS - AGAIN. how dare you

lol didn’t i say i was wrapping this up
uhm…

uhm…. i’d get down i’d get down i’d get down on my knees for yooouuu SING IT BOYS

(sorry, girl almighty playing in ears)

uhm - OH YES so the point is, just finished reading her at breakfast with the boys and realzing they’re one direction and oh good god how perfect it all is. i love it. oh my goodness and she didn’t freak, thank god she didn’t freak. she behaved normally and i can’t be more grateful for that. so happy with these original characters, doesn’t happen often that they are so unique and fun and original and lovable and oh lord

OKAY THAT’S IT I’M DONE

EXCITED FOR NEXT CHAPTER

I LOVE THIS STORY SO, SO MUCH. seriously. you are an incredible writer!

I would suggest spacing out your paragraphs a bit more, sometimes it’s a lot all at once o_o but other than that this is brilliant. no, I will not say brilliam. I promise. OH JESUS I JUST SAID IT welp i suck

I love this story. I cannot wait for your next update. I am so sorry for the jumbled and unprofessional nature of this ridiculously long comment full of me asking myself questions in third person I HOPE YOU AHVE A LOVELY DAY OR EVENING OR NIGHT AND I HOPE THIS WASN’T TOO CRAZY AND THANK YOU FOR YOUR BEAUTIFUL WRITING <3

~Annie :3

and oh god I haven’t even gotten to the boys

how do I

Okay, I’ll wrap this up for now and when you post Chapter 7, I’ll start being more chapter-specific, but for now, here’s an overview of my thoughts:

I absolutely love the girls. I connect majorly with them BOTH, I want them both to have their happy endings, and I think they’re both unique and fantastic and to be perfectly honest, I am basically Megan. Like, literally, I am her. It’s pretty fabulous, I feel like I’m reading this story that’s speaking to me.

Yeah, yeah, Annie, that sounded weird. It’s too late in the night/early in the morning to be writing this comment. Someone’s going to think you’ve lost it entirely.

Oh god I am speaking to myself in third person.

I’M GOING TO TRY TO WRAP THIS UP NOW

The girls are great. And even though I’m more like Megan, I care so much about Taylor too. How did you do that?! Is this getting extremely repetitive? Yes, yes it is.

NIALL. DEAR GOD. NIALL. NIALL GODDAMN HORAN. OH GOD, NIALL. OH, GOD.

YOU ARE JUST

YOU ARE JUST

A CHERUB, A DARLING IRISH ALCOHOL-HANDLING CHERUB. I CANNOT EVEN WITH YOU RIGHT NOW.

Literally everything in the club was so perfect

(not to completely overlook Harry and Liam’s conversation at the hotel lobby, by the way. Heartbroken for both of them. Screw Sophia and the bitch that fucked with Harry. Please do pardon my language, but seriously - screw her. What was her name? Paige? Ugh. I hope she falls off a train.)

Okay, that was horrible. But still. What she did was unacceptable. I can’t allow myself to not want her to be like… maimed.

ANNIE CAN YOU CALM YOURSELF PLEASE

what is happening right now

No, unfortunately, I am not on any kind of drug, nor have I had anything to drink. This is just what happens when I’m sleep deprived and excited about a really good story. Oh, Lord. Is this already page four?

Lol, no, going to page five. Whoops.

(I’m writing this on a word doc because I didn’t want to chance the internet freezing and losing my comment because I have learned the hard way about forty seven times.)

47.

Anywho.

Yes, so, the girls - I love them. Niall - I absolutely goddamn adore him. Oh my god and the way you write his accent is just perfect, I find myself laughing through every one of his lines. It’s his colloquialisms! You write them so beautifully! I can’t get through his dialogue without laughing. Seriously.

And for some reason I also hear Harry’s impression of his accent at times, too - not sure why but that just makes it funnier, so I see that as a win/win/win situation.

AND OH MY GOD CAN WE PLEASE DISCUSS THIS

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“All I’m saying is I’m not above a hook-up with a complete stranger as long as it’s him.” I began to laugh, and it wasn’t long before she was joining in with me. I was extremely glad that she seemed to be having such a great time already, even though I was trying to catch up.
“Could you imagine him whispering things in your ear with that accent?” I questioned, getting a little excited over him myself.
“Could you imagine any of these hot Australian men whispering things in your ear?” We both instantly looked around, catching the eyes of several guys. Some were eating nearby, some were simply walking down the street, and some were getting into their sailboats in the harbor.
“It’s like a buffet,” I commented, sending us both into a fit of laughter.

THIS BIT WAS JUST FLAWLESS

I LITERALLY SPIT OUT MY CHEERIOS.

OH MY GOD I WAS DYING “It’s like a buffet,” SHE SAYS OH MY GOD. I was dying. Seriously. Hilarious.

I got excited at the prospect of the girls clubbing lol. LIAM AND TAYLOR THOUGH THEY ARE SO CUTE OH MY GAWD. yes. gawd. NO BUT SERIOUSLY “I thought I was watching love at first sight actually happening” terrible paraphrasing I just did but regardless the point is that line had my heart melting for Taylor, lIKE YEAH YOU GO GIRL YOU FORGET THAT ASSHOLE RICKY YOU GOT THIS

I may or may not be completely losing it (my ability to remain coherent is fading fast. I also have Little White Lies playing as I write this and so if you notice waves of intense all-capitals, blame the song.)

ANYWAY AS I WAS SAYING

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OKAY, FIRST OF ALL.

FIRST OF ALL.

I AM OFFENDED. GENUINELY OFFENDED, THAT THIS INCREDIBLE STORY HAS BEEN UP FOR AN ENTIRE MONTH AND HAS RECEIVED NO COMMENTS.

WHAT ON EARTH IS UP WITH THAT.

Uhm. Ahem. I apologize. Where are my manners?

*takes moment to compose self* … *breathes*

Okay.

Hi! Hello. Hiiiii. Hai, yes, hello, I’m Annie! It’s lovely to meet you. My full name is Annabelle, but you are more than welcome to call me Annie or that strange commenter or whatever you see fit.

Now, that being said - EXCUSE ME, LIAM. EXCUSE ME, HARRY. DID I SAY YOU COULD CRAWL YOUR WAY INTO MY HEART VIA A COMPLETELY INNOCENT LOOKING STORY THAT DIDN’T WARN ME OF YOUR APPROACH? No. No I did not.

Yet here you are, giving me feels when you’re nOT EVEN IN THE SAME COUNTRY. Ugh. These boys.

Okay.

Moving on.

I can seriously say with wholehearted honesty that this story has captured my attention for more than the fact that it involves a certain Mr. Styles - now, to be fair, I wouldn’t have found it otherwise (I have a developing love for that man that I cannot seem to rid myself of) but despite that minor detail, I have found myself head over heels for Megan and Taylor.

Please, allow me to explain.

Exhibit A:

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“I’m l-leaving you,” I told him. Even though I was still scared shitless, it felt good to actually say those words to him.

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“Please, stay. I’ll change. I’m sorry.”
“No, Ricky. It’s over. I’m done.” Those words, those few, triumphant words, flowed from my mouth one more time.

I suddenly felt extremely overwhelmed. I needed out of here. I needed out of this place. This house. This city. This state. Even this country. And I needed out now.
I jumped out of bed, slipped my flip flops on, and ran down my large staircase. I had to go see Megan. We both had to get out of here.

My god. Taylor. Girl, I… I can’t even. In just a few chapters, you’ve made me want to sit down with you over a cup of tea and just… talk it all out. Oh my goodness. That is a way to hook you in on an original character. I care for her so much already. She’s certainly strong, she holds her ground, but she’s been through hell and she’s ready to escape it. I have respect for her, and I’m excited to see where her story goes from there. Ugh, I adore her. Nothing about her makes me annoyed or indifferent - which, let’s all be honest, can happen at times when people write fanfiction because they’re more focused on the boy they’re writing about then the characters they’re creating to bring the story to life.

I must say that I was already excited about the story just from meeting Taylor.

AND THEN YOU GIVE ME THIS.

Exhibit B:

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Me and the boy that I’ve been in love with since freshman year, and even had a crush on since the seventh grade. I stood there looking at him, trying to work up the courage for what I was about to do. I was about to try and express my feelings for him after all of this time. But I had to wait until we were alone. I had to wait until I was 100% ready. So I just watched him until then.

[[[[May I also point out that the boy you describe to be Kameron reminds me very scarily of a boy I was in love with all through high school. And wouldn’t you believe it - he turned me down when I finally got the guts to say something -.- His name was Sam and he was the apple of my eye for so long. Goodness. He said he “didn’t want to ruin what we had as friends,” but after that, we didn’t talk much.

Boys.

ANYWAY MOVING ON ---

Even though there had been signs that he reciprocated feelings for me, the staring being one of them, he didn’t. I was foolish for ever thinking he would, or even could. He was Kameron Richards, and I was only Megan Kingston. I was stupid for putting so much time and effort into it. I should have known better.

…

I didn’t regret telling him. I just wished I wouldn’t have completely consumed my high school years on solely him. Especially only to end up with a dream that was not going to come true.

[[[OOH GIRL I FEEL THAT I KNOW EXACTLY THAT FEEL OH MY GOD

“Let’s go somewhere.” I said, out of breath.
“Where?” She asked, pulling her legs up to her body.
“Anywhere! Just away from here. Out of Malibu. Out of California. I don’t care where. I just need to get out.”
She nodded her head. “Yeah. ‘Away’ sounds good.”
“Let’s leave them behind, Taylor. Kameron, Ricky. Let’s just go.”
“Where to?” She asked, again.
“Pick.” I offered.
She sat in the sand for a moment, thinking to herself. She stood and smiled. “Let’s go down under.”
“Australia?” I asked.
“Australia.” She smiled.
Nothing had ever sounded better.

^^^ NOTHING ABOUT THIS, ESPECIALLY THAT LAST BIT, IS NOT PERFECT. Yes, I am fangirling over your story right now. Eat some popcorn! :3

I DON’T KNOW WHAT’S HAPPENING RIGHT NOW IT’S TWO AM AND I JUST LOVE THIS STORY

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