I like where this story is going. I do feel like sometimes, your word choice hinders the flow of the story. There were a few times that I had to go back and reread. The layout is nice but the text is a bit small, I had to zoom in to read it. You have detail but not too much to overwhelm the reader. Good job and keep up the good work!
July 5th, 2015 at 10:57pm