October 31st, 2015 at 03:51am
First of all, as always your summary is great. It gives you enough to draw you in and make you want to dive in and know more.
Right away the first chapter left huge questions like what happened to Eden to make her become this way and what was it like for her in the government as a killer. Her character seems like your classic tortured soul with a dark past and even darker deeds she has committed and those characters are always the best because they male you question and yearn to know more.
It's especially interesting that her family is religious and her dad is a damn pastor yet she is the way she is.
And then chapter two! The scene with the acid was written exquisitely. The way you described how the skin around her eyes looked and the pain she felt even had me wincing in pain. And the last sentence about Salem...I will definitely be reading on and I'm sure so will anyone else who has the honor of reading even the summary!
The first chapter really sets the scene and also leaves many questions lingering in the readers' minds. AGAIN, your imagery is terrific! I just love your writing! I also love stories where the character is the black sheep of the family because it really sets for an interesting story. As I continue reading through the story, so many more questions continuing popping up! I want to know what happened to Eden to make her change so drastically and why she keeps herself away from her family so much!
Wow. Wow. I cannot believe acid was thrown on her, and then Salem. I've read stories about girls who have gone through an incident of acid, and it's terrible. The way you described it gave me chills as I tried to imagine it myself, and I can't believe they not only decided to hurt Eden but her sister as well. I can't wait to continue reading more as I am now hooked!