July 5th, 2016 at 02:50am
Hi Audrey, I hope you're doing well, but I read your story :)
I've been digging a lot of Supernatural stories a lot lately and this was nice to put it simply. I like how you portrayed Cas here, so unsure of himself and at times; he wants to be a child acting like an adult or vice versa. I know it drives Dean crazy, but without their idiosyncratic habits that may seem annoying, but without them they wouldn't understand each other so perfectly in a way. I like that about them, Dean makes him feel human and celestial.
Your dialogue was on point and sounded just like these character, I completely read this in their voices, which was sweet.
Good job!
The tone in this was realistic. I love that the scene was simple and straight to the point.
I mostly liked Dean's tone because he seems nonchalant about the situation they're in. Especially when he suggests, “Watch a movie?” I just love this vibe I get from him. With the little things from him, I could tell he's a softie for his friends and family. I think Cas’s character is precious, and I could tell he's a deep thinker through the little details you wrote included - pouting and questioning himself. I liked this touch you included. I also liked how you wrote out the situation with much simplicity; it wasn't unorganized but smoothly executed. I am interested to know how Dean and Sam’s situation went. I can't help but wonder if Cas does something sneaky to go and follow Dean
I do love how easy this was to read. It was a wonderful drabble for many reasons; you gave these characters your own touch, you created an atmosphere packed with hidden emotions, and you delivered a message about a bond nicely.