Case #67 - Comments

@ MissyPrissy
Thank you :3

You did an awesome job with the descriptions... I loved your story! :)

@ Don'tFearTheReaper
Thank you so, so much! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. <3 >w<

Jesus fuck. I am never disappointed when I read your twisted stories. They are always a delight to read.

At the beginning, you immediately had me hooked because of how you labeled your characters. #237, #67. For me, it set in this idea that your narrator is "normal," dealing with mental illnesses. I was not expecting the narrator to be the one. The One.

I loved this line so much: "I love it when they struggle." Right here, I was starting to get that weird feeling I do. It was one of those, well that's weird, but I don't know why yet, feelings. You always do that to me, which is why I love reading your stuff.

The heart. Oh man, the fucking heart. That was a funny scene. Not laughable (because Felix is not a psychopath), but another form of funny. (I can't think of how to describe it, because ironic isn't it.)

The best trait about #67 (to refer to both characters) is that he seems so normal compared to the narrator. Yes, he has (had) DID, but the way you portrayed your narrator shifted that idea for me. Like, #67 wasn't sick, because the narrator was. I don't know how to describe it. It's that heart-in-your-throat feeling, that no matter how normal he acts, the narrator really isn't. And vice versa with #67.

The one thing I would note is your layout. The text was hard to read on the backdrop, along with its size. (Again, it may be my computer here; if so, you can disregard this note.)

Other than that, you always have me at the edge of my seat with your writing. And you always blow me out of the water with what your mind can do. Really, keep up the great work