It does need a little bit of work when it comes to spelling and grammar, but I don't find the story hard to follow. Anyways, looking forward to seeing where this goes!
@ JamieAllOver. Thank you for your feedback, I really appreciate it. I'll take a good look at my editing, I'm sorry to have made it hard to follow. I think I get a bit lost in what it looks like in my own head rather than the paper. I hope I can improve and make the story more enjoyable to read. Also you guys don't have Pizza Express over there? That sucks!
i think this could use a good deal of work tbh. it's a good idea and all, but there are a lot of spelling and grammatical errors, and it just seems to skip a lot of important scenes. it's kinda hard to follow at some points. and then there are some things that just don't make much sense?? like grace being almost 5 and still sleeping in a crib, and the fact that they somehow got wine from a mall food court?? idk, maybe things are different in the uk??