October 31st, 2014 at 07:31pm
The Wicked - Comments
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Please update again soon!April 23rd, 2013 at 09:39pm
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Nice story. Just remember to tweak your grammer because you use "you" and "your" wrongly. I haven't seen them right most of the time, and I haven't seen "you're" yet either.September 28th, 2010 at 02:03am
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More more more more more please :)
Its amazing and beautiful and in more ways the one addictive.
Waiting eagerly xxMarch 3rd, 2010 at 10:07am -
coolio! i started a new page!November 14th, 2009 at 02:57am
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this is super-dee-duper! I hope that you update soon. you should really continue this.November 14th, 2009 at 02:57am
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wow, i just discovered this story and fell in love with it!!!
please, please, please, please, please update soon!!!July 29th, 2009 at 03:07am -
UPDATE!!!! lol I miss this story :)June 22nd, 2009 at 05:22am
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Hey, I really like the story! I couldn't stop reading it!
Can't wait for more!June 13th, 2009 at 03:11am -
I love the story. Keep it up, and keep up the hard work.
Kimmy SullivanMay 27th, 2009 at 03:24am -
awesome story! more when you can!!!!
<3May 22nd, 2009 at 11:21pm -
lovedMay 9th, 2009 at 09:49am
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loving this. :]]May 7th, 2009 at 10:33pm
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loved it!!! more soon?May 7th, 2009 at 02:14pm
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Awh!
That was so cute!
I cannot wait for more!
Soonish, pwease!
peaceout
</3BeejMay 7th, 2009 at 02:32am -
the ending was really cute! :P
more soon?
xMay 6th, 2009 at 11:44pm -
hehe
zacky=sexyyy ;] lolMay 6th, 2009 at 09:14pm -
wow it's been sooooooooo long! great update though! I loved it.
update again soon please!!!!!!!!!
♫Peace Out♫May 6th, 2009 at 04:15pm -
ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhMay 6th, 2009 at 02:52pm
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haha, loved the update.
:)
sorry you're so busy, but glad you got this out.
more soonMay 6th, 2009 at 02:35pm
So back to using words in the wrong context: "Cause you look expectantly good in the music videos." I would like to assume you mean to say "Cause you look exceptionally good in the music videos"
I would also like to think (think because i am now about to start chapter 2 therefore i don't know) that the fact that there aren't any real paragraphs is just your style of writing. Which is totally fine but it kind of takes away from gaining any kind of real insight into the characters you are trying to portray. I mean, i can gather that Zara is witty and quite sarcastic but so far that's about it. There isn't much else i can gain from her character other than she loves A7X and that Zacky V is here favorite of them all.
It would be nice to see some character development because yes, it doesn't have to necessarily be given away totally in the first few chapters to the readers but more insight by at least the end of chapter two would have been nice.
A word of advice from a fellow writer..(.i'm certainly not trying to come across as a hard ass feedback giver...my writing certainly isn't perfect either.) Here's my advice: When you write a chapter, read it aloud to yourself. That way you can pick up on any errors that you may have initially put down while the words were flowing. Reading what you have written aloud helps to pick up on grammatical, sentax and spelling errors.
Overall, i want to read more because i'm a total sucker for ZV ann probably always will be.