Dangerous Fascination - Comments

Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! That is all I can say, Esther! Harry is still the biggest jerk ever but now that he's actually slapped Colette, he's going to have hell to pay for that later when he wants to be nice and make it up to her. I can't wait for another update and to see what's happened to Zara.

I have no idea why I haven't read this yet. Like I keep seeing it when it's updated and I keep telling myself to read it because I just know it'll be amazing but for some reason I haven't. But I'm gonna do it now.

Chapter 1
Ed Sheeran!! I didn't know why I got excited over him since this is a One Direction fanfic. But I just love the ginger, okay. Okay? His cousin Jethro Sheeran follows me on Twitter.

I wanna see the drunk Colette. Should be a fun sight to watch.

HARRY STYLESSS!!!!!! I didn't know what kind of reaction I'm giving right now.

What kind of look are you giving her, young men???? OH MY GOD!!! And she's blushing! SHE'S BLUSHING!!! I need an inhaler even though I don't have asthma. OH MY THIS IS JUST THE FIRST CHAPTER AND HOW DID I MISS READING THIS AGAIN IS BEYOND ME OH MY FUCKING GOD!!!!

Chapter 2
I love the name Zara. I have a friend named Zara and it sounds so pretty.

That gorgeous smile of his. How are you still alive after receiving that smile, I have no idea. AND HOW CAN YOU NOT HAVE FEELINGS FOR LIAM!!!!

Liam... honey, baby, sweet cheeks Liam... I love you and all but I have to admit, you pulling an Edward Cullen on Zara is really creepy.

Chapter 3
OH NO!! OH NO!!!



The key didn't get jammed. THE KEY DIDN'T GET JAMMED! NO!! THAT SPELLS TROUBLE I JUST CAN SMELL IT! IT'S RAINING AND THE KEY IS JAMMED AND....

(OH MY GOD I ACCIDENTALLY CLOSED THE TAB TO THIS FIC AND ALMOST LOST MY COMMENT THANK GOD WHEN I REOPENED TAB THE COMMENT IS STILL HERE I ALMOST CRIED WITH RELIEF OH MY GOODNESS!!)



Ooooohhh!! It's just Ed... smooth, Lina. Smooth.

A date. It's a date.

Chapter 4
Two hours of pure nonsense. That's basically me during my Microfabrication lectures last semester.

Liam is acting weird and he's being all Edward Cullen-ish again and Lina is scared for Zara...



Lina doesn't like suspense because she's a scaredy cat and she knows things are gonna get dramatic very soon and she isn't sure if she's ready and Liam why you acting weird Lina doesn't like you weird. Lina wants Liam sweet and smiley and pretty and Liam please and Lina is rambling and just....











LIAM!!!

Lina is curling herself and tries to forget everything because sunshine Liam can't be a kidnapper. *sobs*

Chapter 5
“Bri, I live like five minutes away I am sure I will be fine to walk. It’s not that late yet."

This... Colette... this is why girls are being kidnapped. NEVER walk alone at nights. NEVER!!



HARRY!!!! Lina is curling herself again. *sobs and cries and sobs and cries*

No. No. No!! This hurts my heart so bad. Creepy Harry and Edward Cullen-ish Liam and Lina hurts so bad. *sobs and cries*

This is a nightmare Lina wants to wake up from. OH MY GOODNESS!!!

Chapter 6
NO! I take back! Liam is not Edward Cullen-ish because Edward never has a devillish smile. Liam. Where is my sweet sunshine Liam baby. (This is hard for my emotions)

Liam creeps me out. Like he's obviously a psycho. He kidnaps someone and hits them but then acts nice. DUDE!! WHAT'S WRONG WITH YOU!!!

Chapter 7
Reading Harry being so mean and rough is really hurting me inside. Baby, marshmallow Harry. Cuddly, lovely Harry. *sobs*

Harry. If you love her, you'd work to get her attention like Ed did. Not kidnap her baby. This hurts Lina. Come on, be nice now. Just...

Chapter 8
I see the clever use of the title in your sentence. And it is dangerous indeed.



OH MY GOD THIS STORY IS GONNA BE THE DEATH OF ME AND I JUST CAN'T EVEN... I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHAT I'M RAMBLING ABOUT ANYMORE AND I JUST... OKAY I NEED TO COOL DOWN!!

update soon?

p/s: I'm sorry for the incoherency of my comment.

I've only read the first chapter so far, but I'm gonna comment now because I won't be able to get through everything right now.

I'm super interested in what's going to happen from the summary. Normally 1D fanfics are all about the boys falling in love with OCs, but I'm really loving the fact that this doesn't seem to be one of those. Also awe, Ed Sheeran. I like that even in the first chapter we're already seeing the characters interact and their relationships to one another are starting to come out.

There was a few spots that had missing words and typos, so maybe just watch out for that. You might want to try varying the length of some of your sentences as well, it seems like you like short sentences (which I really do too so I understand), but sometimes having too many in a row can make the chapter feel kind of choppy.

But yes, I'm excited to read the rest!

Harry is a massive creep but it just adds so much to the story, he has to be a creep in order to want to kidnap anyone. I can't wait to see what happens next, I'm always so excited when I see another chapter has been added to this story.

So, I have suscribed to this and reced it, but I'm commenting for: Leave a Comment, Take a comment. So shall we begin? I think we shall!

So, the first chapter was a really great start to it. When I first read it, I was thinking: "wow this is truly amazing." I didn't see any mistakes -- even though I'm blind at finding them. My favorite quote so far was: Of course you did honey,” that honestly made me giggle and I thought that Zara was bae because of her sass. It was truly an amazing start!

Chapter two: even though it was short, it was really good. I didn't see much mistakes except for one:

"I guess you could say I am." I mumbled, "I mean, we have exams soon that I'm just not prepared for and -"

It should be: "I guess you could say I am," I mumbled. "I mean, we have exams soon that I'm just prepared for and -"

(I bolded what it should be c: )

I am about to read the rest and hopefully my opinion/help actually helped.

- Rachel / Richy -

This is amazing so far! I can't wait for more!
I'm in love with this, please update soon! <3

This is an amazing story so far. Apparently I had subscribed to this ages ago and forgot. I saw it featured on that 10 stories review across my homepage so I clicked and re-read it and the new chapter. I honestly can't wait to see what happens to these girls - the boys are very sadistic and I love the realism of the story. I can't wait to see what happens/ Wonderful job guys!

I hope you both know how amazing this story is. I'm so excited to watch the girls through this journey; but to be honest, I completely did not expect how sick the boys would be! Oh my gosh! They're both already so twisted and my mind can hardly wrap around it. I love it. There's so much drama. Also, can we discuss drug by cupcake, or.

ANYWAY, I love this and cannot wait to read more. Question; what on Earth do the boys want with them?? How long have they had this fascination?? What about these girls specifically has made these two menboythings pursue them so fervently? I want to knooowwww.

I love this and can't wait for more. Keep up the good work!! <3

The drama is beginning now and I can't wait to see what happens next, although I hope we see more of how Zara was kidnapped. I want to know more about her as she suddenly came into the story, Colette does have a foul mouth on her but who wouldn't if they were kidnapped. Keep up the good work girls.

This is a great start to a story that has plenty of options (I was going to say that has more than one direction but changed my mind lol)... it's well written and it has Ed Sheeran in it as well which gives you bonus points in my book... there's so much you can do with this and from what I have read it's going to be amazing :)

Oh my gosh, yes! I'm so happy for Colette, she has a date! I'm glad someone helped her when she couldn't unlock her car door, it was sweet that Ed swooped in to save her. I can't wait to see what happens next, I always get excited when I see one of you two have updated.

I love both the chapters and it is such a wonderful start to the story, I really can't wait to see where you two take this story. It going to be filled with drama, I already know it.

I'm terribly excited to continue reading, so I would very much like another chapter shortly. Thanks Esther!

geez i thought i was gonna love this story before

HELLO ED SHEERAN

i love me some eddy okay such a teddy bear so soft and cuddly and chill like yes man.

“Fucking muppet!” that is honestly the absolute bESt curse i have ever heard in my seventeen years. best. best.

UM I'M NOT SURE HOW MUCH I LIKE OT5 -1 STARING LIKE THAT. THAT'S-THAT-THAT'S PRETTY CREEPY IMMA JUST SAY THAT. (now i have to pretend i don't melt whenever i see louis' name i am WEAK)

i definitely feel that collette has every right to be uneasy after those looks because i'm not so sure i'm liking that myself and i'm just an outsider.

awh, both collette and zara are having bold starts to their day. i understand that feeling entirely, dude (apparently it's stupid / bad to call a girl "dude"??? whoops. i mean. i just.)

liam's smile is pretty gorgeous, aha, i meaaaaaan.

LIAM IS SO A CHARMER LIKE HAVE YOU SEEN HIS FACE.

oh yeah zara you're totally being watched. daddy direction's got his eyes on you. CUE THE DRAKE.

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i'm so sorry this comment is all over the place, i'm drowsy from the medicine i just took and i'm gonna be napping soon, so that kinda explains it. but i love this story and i can't wait to see what you lovely ladies come up with next!!

I can't wait for this story to start, I'm so excited!

oh my gosh