Flight 284 - Comments

This was spectacular! I honestly thought it was going to end up being smutty, but it was just a regular PG-13 cute moment. The way you write the MC in her moments of missing her boyfriend are incredibly realistic of anyone who is waiting on someone or something. It was easy to relate and easy to see everything that was going on because of your description. I'd love to see a sequel to this~

There were a few mistakes: wide away should be wide awake, yes." he chuckled is a period when there should be a comma (watch your usage, this isn't the only one), With this hand should be his hand. And one instance where something was missing: She a knock - "heard," I'm guessing? In the end a whole paragraph repeats. Hope this helps you perfect this masterpiece!

UGHHH SPENCUUUURRRRR, I LOVED DIS! *ugly wail cry* THANK YOU SO MUCH, YOU LITERALLY JUST MADE MY DAY

Clearly, he is a man after my own heart: bringing me Chick-Fil-A and promising me some beach schmexing. Because we've already established that the way to Kandi's heart is through her stomach and through her lady parts

But seriously, thanks so much for taking the time out to write this for me, especially since I know you had such a busy/hectic/stressful weekend. Really, I appreciate it, even if it isn't all that clear from my incoherent rambling. My face is literally like "" right now.