September 29th, 2015 at 03:52am
Wowzers!!! Disfunction and more disfunction. Families rarely are what they appear on the outside. I like the way you've let us in on this families secrets. Maybe a chapter from another family members POV would be interesting?
I'm subscribing, but scared to read more. I'm pretty sure her brother is molesting our main girl...
Please update soon. It's not nice to leave a girl hanging. ;)
Actually, it would be a great idea if--in case you don't have an actual moment you're building up to in the story as "climax"--you used what you already have written as the beginnings to chapters as her diary entry and then continued the chapters with a detailed 3rd or 1st person view of a specific instance that happened inside the family. It would hit home with great impact--especially since you have a good sense of flow and style.