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  • abigail.

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    I don't usually read Avengers fiction but this one is interesting. I'm not a huge fan of the layout, but I think the header image is pretty great. I think you could have added more length and imagery to your chapters. I also agree that maybe you should look into a beta for your story. You can find a thread for that in the forums. Thanks so much for entering my contest! It was a pleasure to read.
    July 10th, 2015 at 05:15am
  • shortygirl

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    Loved the update.
    July 5th, 2015 at 07:39am
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    Loved the update.
    July 5th, 2015 at 07:38am
  • Albluerose

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    @ Divergent
    I would love some help if you don't mine, I write from my phone so I don't always catch it. Thank you for letting me know, I tend to do that at times and idk why lol. I will update asap. :)
    July 3rd, 2015 at 04:06pm
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    July 3rd, 2015 at 09:43am
  • pocahontas.

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    This is really good, and I hardly ever read Avengers stuff! I've never been into Thor, but this was just too good to pass up. As you asked, you do go from third to first in chapter three. Also, I think a beta editor would do really good for this because there are a lot of errors in spelling, grammar, punctuation. Your plot and writing are really strong, but the mistakes sort of take away from the story. I'm actually an editor for a few Indie authors and an online publication if you'd like some help~ I can't wait for the next update so hopefully you'll lift that hold soon!! In Love I think Thor is just the cutest ever in chapter four, so I need to know what happens next!
    July 3rd, 2015 at 09:36am
  • shortygirl

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    Wait he's with Jane in this? Well this is going to get more intersting.
    June 30th, 2015 at 08:02am
  • Forgetful-Insomniacs

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    I've been looking for something like this i like it i hope you keep going I'll definitely be waiting for more
    June 27th, 2015 at 06:00am
  • regulargal

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    This is amazingggg. Keep going please.
    June 25th, 2015 at 09:00pm
  • shortygirl

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    I usually don't read much avengers fan fiction but this caught my eye.
    June 7th, 2015 at 07:27am