Smoke - Comments

Agh drabbles are my favourite thing. You added so much emotion in such a small amount of words, and the concept you have here is really cool and easy to relate to. You transitioned from the beginning, where the character was staying away, to the end, where the character couldn't stay away. It was really cool to read.

One thing:
Stupid me to think you're just one of those to add on my list.
This sentence felt awkward to me, I think it was the "add on my list" part. I think maybe "add to my list" might sound better? That could just be me though.

Amazing job!

@ Michael Westen
Thank you so much! Your comment's really helpful, I'll take note of those. Also, I'm glad you liked it!

You know what, I like this. It's short and sweet, and the amount of emotion and depth you've put in to it honestly surprises me. The concept is just so easy to grasp. I love how the character goes from staying away, to not being able to.

A few things I'd like to mention/point out:

"Meeting you was fate but screwing up was way beyond my fucking control." - you should put a comma after fate.

"Maybe it was the way you'd rake my hair?" - I get what you're saying here, but perhaps if you added " your hand through my hair" it would sound a bit less weird. That's just my opinion though.

I really do like it though, and I'm going to recommend it.