In Our Hearts, We Must Carry On - Comments

  • Albluerose

    Albluerose (205)

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    I have to say that I love this story.

    1. I saw one minor mistake, I think it was chapter two, you messedhthe link up for italic so the last part of the story is in italics.

    2.I would love to see more of her and Dallas, I think i their relationship is so damn cute.

    3. The whole abortion thing, very smart to put a warning for others. I think the way you wrote it was amazing, not to much detail but you were able to grab the emotion. I've been through it, my boyfriend at the time went with me and slept in the waiting room. So this story brought me back to that day (it's okay, I'm okay). I was emotionally okay, he wasn't. He had resentment towards me. Which is understandable. I would love to see what she goes through after emotionally, if it upset her alot and she needs him. If she's just okay, like something very emotional.

    Either way, love this story.
    June 6th, 2016 at 11:32pm
  • cthylla13

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    Great start! I can't wait to see what happens!
    July 16th, 2015 at 02:35am