Puppy Love - Comments

queerdawson (100)

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@ LordOfTheThunderCats
Thank you for your feedback though !!

July 17th, 2015 at 04:16pm

queerdawson (100)

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@ LordOfTheThunderCats
I usually put the thoughts in italics and I planned on fixing that today because I was in a rush to post this last night and I wasn't feeling to great. As for the dialogue, I think if it's not a constant back and forth thing then it shouldn't be on its own new paragraph ya feel ???? Idk I hope I'm making sense

July 17th, 2015 at 04:15pm

wish on a firefly (885)

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Double ignore. >.<

July 17th, 2015 at 05:01am

wish on a firefly (885)

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This was a really great start but I think you should put the thoughts in italics and the dialogue needs to be separated into a new paragraph. Just a few helpful tips. ^^

July 17th, 2015 at 05:01am

jackbarafap (100)

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this made me happy!!!!

July 17th, 2015 at 02:58am