Run Rabbit, Run - Comments

That was so gruesome, poor doggie.

I'm really intrigued by this story, though. It has a very ominous feeling to it and as a sucker for dark and scary stories you've definitely caught my interest.

Your summary was really great; it hooks the reader's attention and makes them want to read further. And then your descriptions all through the prologue kept me riveted. Your dialogue also works very smoothly, which is always a bonus for me because a lot of stories on Mibba have disjointed or unrealistic dialogue.

I can totally picture Gem being fascinated by the grossness of a dead dog. This is really cool and you should definitely update it.

oh boy. that was my first thought when i read the prologue. i honestly love the tone of voice used here, it reminds me of stories told over a campfire... it's so free-flowing and the southern tinge is lovely. as for the dialogue, it was short, but said a lot for the most part. i liked how it followed this straightforward pattern. totally subscribing. :~)