Oh Death - Comments

First off, I have to admit that I’m not as familiar with the Egyptian mythology as I am with Greek and Roman. The extent of my knowledge on Osiris is basically just that one Supernatural episode. Regardless, I thought you did an amazing job with this! You’re right in that it’s not the same as the stuff you typically choose to write about, but I definitely don’t think that’s a bad thing. Everybody needs a change of pace every now and then, right?

I also kind of disagree with you about this having a lack of description: I actually thought it had an appropriate amount of description for the brief scene that this piece encapsulated. Sure, you didn’t describe every little thing, but you chose to describe the things that truly mattered, such as the rush he received from taking souls and the soul in itself as it was being devoured by him.

Another aspect of this drabble that really stood out to me was the flow. There’s definitely a distinctive pattern and pacing to this piece, and it really added to the scene you created. I will also admit that I loved how you waited until the very end of the piece to “reveal” that the main character was Osiris.

So yeah, as always, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, and I hope that you decide to do more sort of morbid things like this in the future.

I really liked this, it's short but powerful and held my attention until the very end :)

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I think there could of been a bit more description on "death". Like how he looked and if any tried to run in fear. This is very short so there isn't much to comment on, I didn't see any mistakes and I do like the description that you do provide and how he enjoys his " job". But all in all this is very good :)

so chilling
lalaloved it
and extra brownie points for the fantastic layout
this is golden, my friend

Woah. This was awesome. I'm in full agreement with Kara, it would be great to see this turned into something more.

I did catch a few mistakes, such as:

the confusing look on his face
and
He loved seeing how surprised they found

Love the layout.
This is a fantastic drabble and I would love to see this get turned into a longer piece. It is very interesting!

firstly, i really liked the layout. it was small, but very creative. as for the drabble, it was short and to the point. i loved how you characterized the god of death so well.