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  • Lovesxchokehold

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    Just stumbled upon it! I really like it
    March 22nd, 2017 at 06:33am
  • AJ9

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    Hoping you're gonna update this again soon cos it's brilliant!
    January 13th, 2016 at 09:58pm
  • JustDuckie

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    Oh shittle sticks!!!!!
    November 8th, 2015 at 09:22pm
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    I love this and I've missed it. I hope you'll update again soon xxx
    October 23rd, 2015 at 08:22am
  • synystergates__1001

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    This is really good can't believe that dude raped her.....can't wait to read what happens next
    August 18th, 2015 at 08:48am
  • JustDuckie

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    NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! HOW DARE THAT JACKASS RAPE HER! NOT COOL BRO!
    August 18th, 2015 at 06:05am
  • JustDuckie

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    Bahahahaha, "bitch tits"
    August 11th, 2015 at 12:20am
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    I love this so far lady <3
    July 28th, 2015 at 10:19pm
  • Damsel of Darkness

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    Not a bad start to your story Smile I like the idea of Johnny having a twin sister and an older one. It's different, as often sibling stories that I've read have the girl being one of the others sister. Looking forward to seeing who she ends up falling for.

    Word of advice, maybe take a look and work on your spacing. The chapter reads as 3 or 4 large blocks of text and therefore may be hard to follow for some readers. Double spacing and cutting paragraphs into two to three lines a piece might help, while also making sure to double space between each speakers line. For example:

    "There's a shark!"

    "That's not a shark, it's a dolphin."

    Excuse the random statements, it was the first thing that came to mind. Hahaha. Anyways, look forward to seeing where you take this.
    July 28th, 2015 at 09:54pm
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