Prince of Blood - Comments

Nice start. Can't wait for the rest

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T

OK, nice work dropping hints to the vampire thing. It was subtle and not too in-your-face. I like Becca's sarcasm and I loved the bit where she's mocking her mother's use of 'Honey', and her statement 'Actually, pot was my pot. Blueberry pancakes were my crack'. Those were golden :) I do have a few questions, though. What sort of vampires are these? They seem OK in the sunlight. Does Becca not see Austin's pointy canines when he grins? I assume they must be drinking blood from those sports bottles, so that's OK. But if Austin is dead, how can he be having sex with so many hot young women? Look, not to be crass, but at the very least, his anatomy won't respond to them ;)

I really enjoyed your first chapter. Update soon :)