The Hóngyǎn Mistress - Comments

The summary got me excited because I've always been intrigued with investigation and stuff like helping others in the system. I love the fact you put a little bio of the two main characters with their main purposes and how (didn't read yet but making a guess) they seem to be opposites but have the same objective from the start.

Your layout is beautiful. I am not a fan of straight up white on black font with no border, but this works for me as well as the story you have. I love the simplicity of the layout. 10/10 amazing.

Now on to the story....
I love Chinese New Year. It's so interesting to know about the year of the dragon, horse, etc. and even the elements within it! God, I'm loving this cultural sense implicated in the story, mainly because I unconsciously don't read anything similar to this. It's nice, fresh. I love the small details incorporated in the first chapter about culture and the little figurines about Chinese New Year.

AND CAN I JUST SAY HOW MESSED UP THAT IS WHERE THE GUY WAS LIKE "YOUNGEST WE GOT IS 12." like, that made me feel weird
AND THIS CHAPTER REMINDED ME OF THIS EPISODE OF HAWAII 5-0 I WATCHED AND IT'S COOL BECAUSE I'M PICTURING YOUR WRITING SO CLEARLY AND VIVIDLY

WINSTON IS HIDING HIS SOFTER SIDE (or is it just the romance part of me talking)

She was breathtaking, "can you make her something to eat, please?" Here, I liked this transition where Winston captures Xiu Mei's beauty and gets memorized by her looks rather than her job or her purpose being there. I like that about this line.

And I would like point out a theory I made of the reason why Xiu Mei finally spoke when Win's mother spoke to her: maybe Xiu Mei feels comfortable or holds some connection with his mother, that she feels it's okay to use her mouth with his mom's presence. In a way, I feel like Xiu Mei is strong minded and watches her actions and reactions of those around her, in exception of Mrs. Chu. Maybe Mrs. Chu reminds Xiu Mei of her own mother, I don't know. IT'S FULL OF MYSTERY AND I AM ENJOYING EVERY INCH OF IT.

The food sounds so good right now

I KNEW XIU MEI HAD A PLAN OR SOMETHING BEIND HER BEING THERE. My goodness, the fact that she was there looking for her sister with this plan of her's is making me feel sad but at the same time glad? BECAUSE I WANT XIU MEI AND WINSTON TO JUST START WORKING TOGETHER, FALL IN LOVE, STAY IN LOVE, THE END. But I have to admit, I hate that Jenny is gone, LIKE WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS TO ME

"If I wanted to take you down, I'd have done it by now with a sense of respect." HOMEGIRL KNOWS HOW TO SMACK TALK WITH CLASS

I am hooked. I love Winston and Xiu Mei already.

This is completely random but does Winston have a Chinese name?
because I'm curious if he does
EDIT: I KNEW HE HAD ONE, I JUST DON'T KNOW WHY I FORGET OKAY, WOW, i'm sorry

WHY IS XIU MEI NOT WITH WINSTON? I THOUGHT THEY WERE WORKING TOGETHER A month is too long for them to be apart. WHY
oh jk, she's back
WHEN HE CAME OUT RUNNING IN HIS POLKA-DOTTED BRIEFS

Okay, our girl Xiu Mei has done some research about Winston and his gang, it's scary but interesting because she obviously needed to find Win and has great interest in him. I just don't know if they are romantic (the romance in me is talking again) or only work related. WE SHALL SEE.

BUT WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEN NEXT????????

Your writing is so beautiful. I'm here reading it, wishing I wrote like this. All that was going through my mind was
I'm hooked I'm hooked I'm hooked

The detail you implant in your descriptions aren't so heavy where I read every inch of it because I couldn't afford to miss a single detail. The characters you've created has opened a door for me that I couldn't help but smile at the small things Mrs. Chu, Winston or Xiu Mei would do. I love the plot you have on your hands. Seriously, you have a great talent and I am very invested in what you have inspired for this piece

First off, why are your layouts always so damn gorgeous and breathtaking? Because damn, I have to confess that I've always been a bit jelly.

Now, getting on with it... why is your writing always so damn captivating and perfect? You are such an amazing writer, Nikki. Like, seriously, everyone here is in love with what you put out.

One thing I noticed was in the fourth paragraph down in the first chapter, it says "Not only did he made prostitutes" so the D in made should be a K. Or you could just put, "He not only made prostitutes" ya know? Just thought I'd point that out!

Also, you give me life with your descriptions. You have such a unique way with words that really just keeps my attention and it's like, holy shit, I'm attracted to your writing. I loved how you described Winston as made up of muscle and mass, and how you described his tattoos as quaking over his body. It's stellar imagery that's fresh and new so it stays with me personally.

I'm absolutely loving Xiu Mei. She's a little spitfire and I love how she's just so introverted, but a badass if you get into her personal little bubble. The fact that she opened up to Winston's mom so quickly also was just perfect and made me smile. She's also just such an interesting character. Like, I find it curious how hearing the news of her sister's death isn't so much of a shock, but I guess given the circumstances it wouldn't be. I'm also curious as to why Jenny and Xiu Mei didn't grow up together.

Honestly, I think all of your stories have such amazing potential. I definitely think that you can put anything you write into a novel and sell millions of copies because your words are just magic. Keep up the great work with this, Nikki!

The layout is absolutely gorgeous, and I love the picture. It really captures the strength of a woman.

You really build up on the characters' movements and thoughts, so it really allows the reader to visualize the character well. I already love the Xiu Mei Yang (what a beautiful name!), and her defiant personality as well as her strength. I also enjoy Winston's character, and how he's secretly a mommy's boy at heart. I also love the diversity of the story! Also, your writing is captivating and beautiful.

Ha! When Winston went running out in his underwear! I absolutely love the story, and I think it's so well planned out. Xiu Mei is strong and smart, and I adore her character. I cannot wait to see where the story goes!

You're such a amazing writer! I knew that you could write, but wow. This has made me so happy and proud. You need to get this published, sweetie. It's too beautiful to be real. I can't wait to read more. Two chapters and I'm already addicted!

This is gorgeous and I have a sword that looks very similar to the one in the picture.