February 23rd, 2016 at 12:29am
From the first sentence, I absolutely fell in love with the description you used. I could picture everything and it was so adorable to see in my head.
One thing that I automatically loved about this is the fact that you know what you're talking about. Nothing about the sex is unrealistic (ie soaking towels). You never see the small things talked about in stories and I personally love the fact that you did that.
Tay tried opening her legs with a playful grin. "Look, breakfast!" I FREAKING DIED. BLESS THIS!
This was such a beautiful one-shot. The ending really isn't as abrupt as you say it is, honestly. I think you ended it at just the right place.
I personally didn't see any mistakes, but damn I was too into the story to pay too much attention to grammar (my bad).
This is such a lovely comment! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Like I say in the author's note, this was the first fic I wrote after a long writing hiatus thanks to writer's block on all my stories. But I saw the prompt and just wanted to write something, and this was the result. I like it, but I've always been quite nervous about it. To see you speak so highly of it (and award it second place in your contest???!!!) is very flattering. So thank-you!
I do try really hard to keep smut realistic and not just let my imagination run away from me; I do so hate seeing particularly ridiculous sex stories. And I'm also glad you found that part funny, I liked it a lot myself. :')
I'll stop rambling now, I'm just very thankful!