Sunrise - Comments

I'm here judging the entries for the Awesome Slash contest!

Layout / Summary

The layout is nice and simple, and although I'm not normally a fan of heavily-moving GIFs (I am so easily distracted and find they tend to distract from the story), this one's actually survivable. All of your colours mesh together well and it's very nicely put-together. Your summary is a little bare, but the quote itself is one that intrigues me, so it kept me interested for the most part.

Content

I actually physically felt my heart sink when I realised what Johnny was about to do. Committing suicide is one of those things that I have very strong feelings myself about, and I always end up feeling dread when I read about characters that want to do so themselves -- it breaks my heart to realise that there are people who do feel like this is the only option, because I've been there myself. So in a way, I related to this heavily and it drew me into the story more. You also have a wonderful way of conveying emotion through words, which definitely comes across well here.

I love the stark contrast between Johnny and Jimmy's characters in this, especially when Johnny's about to jump. Jimmy's just so cheerful and bright, and I instantly found myself drawing parallels between him and the sunrise that Johnny loves so much -- I like that link, even if it wasn't intentional. And in the end, the fact that they get together so well and end up being an item definitely solidifies that link. They're good for one another, and I like that it ends up with them both being happy, even if it started off out of pure despair and darkness.

Concrit

I didn't actually notice anything when I was reading.

Overall

This was beautiful and heartbreaking and great all at the same time. The emotion in this was raw and at points, difficult to read, but it was definitely worth it by the end. I'm not usually a person for romance (in fact, I'm the last person for romance), but even this had me feeling all warm and fuzzy inside. Beautiful!

Okay so I found like one errors ("At at") probably just a mistake double post. Other then that I didn't find any other errors, or I could just be so tired I didn't notice them haha. Okay, so. I love this. The way you wrote this was amazing and such beauty held in it, in a sense I feel like this story can actually help someone with depression and show them that things can get better. I like how there wasn't to much detail, but there wasn't a lack of detail either. Very good work, keep it up.

Cute! A little rushed maybe, but I loved it. Jimmy cheering Johnny up is always good. X3