Stand by Me - Comments

It's ok. Just do better because we all want to know what happens next.

Layout + Summary
The layout is super simple, but lovely at the same time. I really enjoy it. The summary is heart wrenching, but I'm so excited to see where you take this story. I can tell it's going to be a tough one to read.

One
I love how you opened the chapter. At once the reader is hit with tons of emotion. I'm feeling what Raegan is feeling.

Chris definitely doesn't sound like the best father in the world. Working through the funeral and everything? That's not right. Plus, he should've tried a little harder in getting his daughter to eat something. And he didn't know that Reagan was given pills; that says a lot about how much he cares.

I blame myself too. -->This line definitely hits home with me. I don't yet know what happened with Kristina, but I'm getting the feeling that it really wasn't Reagan's fault.

Uggggh, just from the speech Kristina's mom gave, I don't like her. She reminds me of my own mother: completely fake.

I definitely want to see where you'll go with this. I'm really curious to see where Reagan's life goes and how she adapts to life without her best friend. I didn't see any mistakes and the chapter flowed super well. I'm definitely subscribing. Well done!

the summary definitely pulls @ the heartstrings & im almost hesitant in clicking the first chap bc ik it'll be heartbreaking. you must have some sort of talent if you can get us all to first mentally prepare ourselves before divulging into this piece!

im absolutely in love w/ regan. you make her so realistic & to be completely honest, the whole plot seems realistic. things like this - no matter how heartwrenching - deserves all the love & care. you've touched base on something we all need to open our eyes to & i can't wait to see how well you get this story going!

I like how you say it's going to be a heart wrencher when in reality
MY HEART ALREADY FEELS WRENCHED
SERIOUSLY DUDE
MY HEART FUCKING HURTS wtf what are you doing to me
this sounds amazing so far, rip kristina you sound like a wicked fkn gal

Layout/summary The layout is intriguing and I wonder if it means something to the story itself. The summary is sad and leaves me hoping that the main character doesn't get dragged down and blamed, although it seems like she already is being blamed and that itself is horrible.

Chapter 1 So as I read the story I tend to comment as I go along and immediately this pops out at me - complicatedness - I'm not 100% sure but I think it needs to be changed to complications it just seems like it'd sound better. So just like "due to complications in our relationship"... Maybe?

That being said I can already relate somewhat to Reagan and her relationship with her father.

I look at him from where I’m bundled up under my covers. is an incomplete sentence.

Okay this is probably going to sound harsh, but that eulogy sucked. I don't know if you meant it to be that way or if I'm coming off as a complete asshole right now but wow. From what little I've read of Mrs. Brennan she's not getting a #1 Mom sticker this year.

I definitely don't think Reagan is being selfish by not giving a eulogy, eulogies can be very personal and she's grieving, she doesn't need to go up and talk in front of people that hate her and people that blame her.

Overall I think this story has potential. I really hope it doesn't stay this depressing, that Reagan's life gets at least a few rainbows.

She seems like a pretty good character. I think you have a good idea of where you are going with her, her dad, and the other characters.

This is definitely got angst in it, that's for sure.

I wish you luck with this and hope nothing I've said has offended you.