The Demons in Us - Comments

This is fantastic! Your quotes and visual imagery are super enriching and everything is just so clean and clear! As a reader it keeps us at the edge of our seat in awe for more!!

I wondered if you were going to continue with this story! And I wish you were more passionate about it because I am. I love it.

I loved this update. I can't wait to see what's going to happen.

I wish you cared more about this story, because it's amazing! I had to reread everything for the memories to come back. She is so kind hearted. So far everyone around her sucks. Except for her dad. I hate her boyfriend and Jacob. I hope you update again soon. You're such a great writer.

This is really good. I don't normally read stuff that's not a zacky vee fic on here, but I'm glad I poked around and read this. It's really good so far. I'm actually very excited to read more. It's not too much of a surprise to me considering I already know that you're such a great writer. I enjoy the work you do.

Whoa.

I'm not sure what I was expecting when I started reading, but this...well, I think it's safe to say this surpassed basically any and all expectations I might have had. The prologue read like a real article and the last line of the next chapter just had my heart sinking into my stomach. Rape is a touchy subject for me, I'm always hesitant to read any story that involves rape because I find a lot of writers just don't portray the situation and the horror of it and all the feelings that follow properly. But knowing you and your writing, I know you'll do it justice. Now I'm sitting here, wanting to know if the girl with the gun is the victim, or the sister, or even the main character, and I want to know what will happen to those boys who attacked that poor girl - even though, if this story is at all like real life, I already fear they'll get off with nothing more than a slap on the wrist. I just need more of this, bottom line, because whoa.

My brain can't stop its self! The shooter is female, she's not mentioned to be the cops daughter in the prologue, and she's dead, but now he has twins... it thickens..

And hello, let me revisit the line in the comment previous about taking us places we hadn't planned. Like wow. I suspected, I kind of thought, but I didn't peg it to actually happen. I dislike rape stories on the internet, which is extremely harsh of me to say. And maybe I don't hate them, but I hate the way that people try to portray that situation. It's a touchie issue for me and to graze over the situation as if a life altering moment was only a mere few seconds, always hurts me. You ARE NOT one of those writers. I can already tell this is going to be intriguing. The drop of that situation at the tale end, so quickly, so sharply is thought provoking. It doesn't come with winded explanation, and it fulfills the thought we all had. A lot of the time the bad things NEVER happen in stories. There's that build up to the moment but the writer doesn't want to take it there or maybe doesn't want to hurt their characters.

I REALLY enjoyed this update. (is this the portion you rewrote?) I'm waiting ever so patiently (not really, I'm not patient) for the next portion.

Awesome.

I'm always excited for your stories. You always tend to take your readers places they weren't ready for; and we always enjoy the ride! Just the prologue is thought provoking. I wonder if you placed your words correctly on purpose? You did mention that the gun was owned by that man, and his daughter was injured, and yet the shooter remains unnamed. Which leaves me wondering... Maybe it's just my brain.

You're always good and I'm excited for more! I hope your writers block clears when you write this.