Crimson Gone - Comments

I really like this! Your style is great! I love the way Alex speaks/thinks. I really think you should continue! At least I hope you will. Subscribed!

you have a wonderful style of writing. I may be a little late on this, but this is fantastically structured and I really really like your characterization so far. To be less serious, I love it a lot a lot.

@ runs_on_coffee
Hey, thanks for taking the time to review!

The choice to start off as a different POV was simply a stylistic choice. I'm sorry if that took away from it....it will happen occasionally in order to give the story a twist I need to get the story to tie together. Hope you enjoyed it :)

oh my gosh, I love the way this is written!! I'm so excited for the rest of it

I absolutely love how this is written. Quick thing, though, yo h start off in first person, then switch to third. Was that on purpose?

ahh man I'm so frustrated with Jack but I love his personality anyway? all that arrogance and smugness is charming in a weird way, especially with the eyeliner. (and then i remember this is all fiction and this Jack character is made up....) anyway, I really want to know what happens when Alex meets him, or if he even will. I normally don't get this into updating fics, but I'm getting attached...

@ YouMeAtATL
yeah, i totally understood your point, it was just the names that confused me. i'm glad i could help, keep up the amazing work!!!

@ police911
Thank you so much for taking the time to comment! I have removed the Brendon and corrected it to Jack. Thanks for pointing that out <3 also, the whole 'daddy' line was meant to be sardonic on Alex's part. It's meant to be like "oh so you talked to daddy (refereeing to jacks dad)" I realized I used the wrong parent name- Jack's dad is not Peter. I'm so sorry! I'm still new to this fandom <3 thank you!

i love this so much! it's one of my favourite things right now, and i have no idea why i haven't commented before :^)

i don't mean to be a bother or criticize, but you did say to let you know about confusing parts, and you forgot to take out the word 'Brendon' a couple paragraphs below where Jack says "Fourth and Freemont." Also, the part about Wentz having a meeting with 'daddy,' shouldn't it be Jack's dad? You used Alex's father's name, but maybe I'm wrong and completely misunderstood that

I'm so excited for this! I really hope you continue :)

continue with this story, please.

I liked it, it's different, please update .

This is very interesting and is way different than any story I've read before, please update soon!!

This is awesome!! Already subscribed and cannot WAIT for an update. It's incredibly well written, it's unusual and different, I love it; please keep posting as I am genuinely excited to find out what happens!

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This is one of the best fics I've read in a long time :) I hope you decide to continue with it!

Loving this. Never seem a Jalex story like it. So excited

i really like this!! keep up the good work!!

Yes! I'm so excited this is getting posted, and thank-you for the beta shout-out omg. :') I'm gonna re-read the chapter properly later because it still makes me fucking laugh. Honestly, I know you were worried about their personalities not translating from Ryden to Jalex, but I think everything fits Alex and Jack so nicely. It's so fucking funny. And eight subscribers already! That's a good start.

And hey look one of my baes @ kickthepj likes it, DAS HOW U KNOW UR DOING A GOOD JOB.

@ kickthepj
I'm so glad to hear that! With the number of fics out there, it is so difficult to try and be original! I'm glad you love the metaphor, I think it's a nice running gag that will make sense in the end.

It took a lot of convincing from friends to bring this back, I was so utterly destroyed after I had to take it down the first time- this story had been my baby, and Ryden is the ship of all ships, but I thought I'd give it a go with Jalex.

If I get a good response, the story will be continued. As of now, It is an 'experiential' story to see how the ATL fandom reacts to it.

Thanks for reading!!!