It Was a Transparent World - Comments

@ Shayney92
You have no idea how relieving it is. I was so sure I wrote complete crap. xD Thanks a million bro!

@ Lady Nikki Nightmare
Thanks Bells! Glad you remember the earlier version too! And thx for reading <3

@ aubs

You totally made my day! Thank you SO much! I'm so going to work on the next chapter now. Hope to get it done by tonight XD Thanks again hun <3 This means the world!

The layout is menacing; I like how the hand in the background could be seen through the story background.

Silver Eyes. I like this phrase for those who can see ghosts, or as the summary said to look through this world into another (which was my favorite part of the summary and ultimately made me subscribe to the story without even reading it yet).

The prologue was just as chilling as the layout. My favorite past of the chapter is that there was more questions that popped into my mind than there were answers. Why was he haunting her? How did they meet? What is his deal being mean and all? But seriously. This was awesome and mysterious and I loved reading it.

I remember the first version of this really well because I liked it, but this prologue is better. It gives an intensity and a scare factor that the first version lacked. Keep a little bit of the mystery, but definitely keep writing it :)

This is so tense. Like I legit feel so uncomfortable that he is making her kill herself. ( I suppose this is a good thing) SHE SHOULD'VE JUST RUN AWAY!

I suppose there is a lot of unknowns here which is good, there's so much to find out!

This is good, very scary. But good.