Don't Forget to Be the Way You Are - Comments

@ Limitless;;

Naww thank you so much :3

I really love your description. You have a way of doing it that doesn't come off as too cliche or boring or that there was too much thought put into it. I really enjoy that. I really enjoy Brian, he's a really cute character! I don't know anything about the band you're writing about so I'm reading as original fiction and it's still a really well thought out and written story.

I love the relationship between Brian and Stefan. They're really cute and I kind of feel bad that Brian is trying to deal with all of these issues on his own.

I really like this story. I got through a few chapters and it's very well written. Great job!

@ gracious;
I think that's a good way to be, particularly online.

In NY, it's just "fucked up" lol. Got it.

Like I've said before, I have thick skin. I'm hella tired and can barely see right now, but not much gets me buggered up.

@ gracious;
LOL sorry, yes, I guess so :P Buggered up = messed up haha

@ Join the Masquerade
Not buggered of all. (Buggered? Never heard that word lol is that Australian slang?)

@ gracious;
Thanks heaps

Just to clarify, in case I buggered up, you don't leave the next part lowercase after every section of dialogue. I think below my comment on your story, Kitsch explained it pretty well (better than I did lol) If your dialogue ends the same time the sentence ends and the next sentence is a new sentence, it's a capital "he/she/whatever else". If the end of your dialogue is not the end of your sentence, it's a lowercase "he/she/whatever else" eg:

"I really love waffles," she said.
"I really love waffles!" she exclaimed.
"I really love waffles." She grabbed a loaded plate.

But thank you for the concrit :)

Summary/ Layout

I had to google who Brian Molko is. I do that a lot for a lot of fanfictions and just from that quick google he seems very cool so I'm excited.

The layout is pretty basic and clean. Easy to read which is always the main thing. I feel that the "All in all..." sentence could either be put under the lyrics in a smaller font or completely taken off. But, then again, that could just be me cause I like some mystery in my summaries and not know the "this is pretty much about XYZ" when I'm about to read something.

One

Your descriptions are pretty solid. They flow within the story and very easy to visualize.

You did what I did. "It’s no problem." He gave Stefan a gentle squeeze...

Two

The story is moving very steadily. I can tell you're taking your time to fully frame everything within the story, but it's not painstakingly slow. I've never heard of the band prior to this fanfiction so I can only react to dynamics based on what you're writing and they seem very sturdy. Though, I can't quite yet make distinctive voices in my head. Which is okay since most characters don't get their 'own' voice until the story really gets framed and settled.

Everything feels natural. Nothing forced or pushed. Which is amazing.

Three

The page dividers are so faint on this layout. I'm really struggling to see them. I just take the extra spacing as a cue the scene has changed.

A kiss on the cheek is such an innocent way to show two people are together lol.

Four

Brian comes off kinda sassy/prima donna in this chapter lol. Unlike what I said in chapter 2, character voices are very distinctive now and very lovely. I like how you portray everyone and they all seem to have their little role and place.

Amelie seems sweet. (Pretty much reacting as I read now.)

Overall

As a person who doesn't know this band, this just feels and comes across as a generally well-written story. The plot progressed and grew throughout each chapter and even though I only read up to chapter four, the characters are pretty well done, even if they aren't yours. Got to know them more and their voices became more distinctive and you framed and wrote everything very well. Great job.

The relationships and dynamics and realistic and cute. Nothing is cringe-worthy or comes off as bad. This is just one of the better fanfictions on mibba both content and technique wise. I just wish I knew/was a fan of this bad so I would've gotten more out of it.

@ kvngrimes1
Maybe you ought to do your research next time. Each to their own.

Wow. Am I glad I discovered that the foundation and underlying nature of Mibba is fan fiction, which is not thought provoking at all. It is merely a social media platform, a chat room; a place where teenage girls can lose themselves in the fantasy of having something to do with an artist who is not even renown nor as any good. If anything, it has made your members worse writers than when they signed up. Good day .

@ PixieInFlames
Thanks so much! Unfortunately there are a lot of Placebo stories floating around on here that are mine that have not been finished... sorry about that XD I've got a good feeling about this one though :)

You might be interested to know that a bunch of fans write fan fics for them on the Placebo forum found here (you might have to sign up to see the fan fic section labelled "elaborate fantasy") There is an absolutely fantastic fanfic on there called "Days Before You Came" by Trillie and I highly recommend it. It's not quite finished but is being continued and it's hands down the best fan fic I've ever read in my life.

I am soooo SO glad this new Placebo story exists! I can never find one that is finished or good. I'm excited to continue reading this.