The Dial Tone - Comments

LOVE IT =]
xox

Ok, I LOVE THIS STORY TOO!!!
:D :D :D

who the hell does this guy think he is? kidnapping her best friend then her? wow

thnx for the comment
I'll work on it

peachgirl102:

this story is really cool now i wish youd finish up. love ya your friend peaches!

creepy thats really strange there

this story is really cool now i wish youd finish up. love ya your friend peaches!

s'okay. A paragraph cannot count as a chapter though. Make the chapters longer, and add paraqgraphs and I really like it^^

Oooh, I love this story! It has suspense and that
Jason character is a freak. He's obsessed to the max.
But I love how this story is going and I can't wait for it to get
on a roll! Update soon.

:cute:

lol kim...can't wait for when I post your chapter

Omg I love the story so far!!!

That could be cool I will talk that over with my new co-author my friend Kim(yes the character chained in the basement is based off of her) ; Lifestory87

k so an idea... maybe jason has some freaky dark secret and elizabeth threatens to expose him if he doesn't release her and kim?

Wow O.o
I really like this story!!
You're a grat writer! Psh, I like your story way better than mine!!! lol
Okies, I'ma go subscribe now .... later!

thnx yeah i'm tying its just i don't really know where to go with this so ideas are always welcome message me oh and maybe if someone wants to be an editor or co-writer or something
well anyway I'm gonna update now

More criticism :3..
I agree with the grammer. And I'm not really one to judge you writting and all but I feel that the chapters are alittle short. More detail and more of what exactly is happening would make it better. Think of it as if it were a movie going through your head, your own made up movie then go for it. Write it as you see it. That's what I do :]
But above all I really like the story!

It made sense
thnx I'm always up for constructive critisism
I'll try to add more suspense thnx
more soon

hey. this is pretty good.
constructive criticism though.
the main thing i had a problem with was typos like spelling and punctuation. i noticed you used 'to' instead of 'too' a few times. also, some of the longer paragraphs were sort of hard to read, so maybe break them up? and finally, you're writing a sort of suspense-ish story, so maybe make that accomodate the writing? like, i felt in parts like i was just reading a story. not particularly a suspenseful story. ahh that probably won't make any sense.
anyway, keep it up! i'd like to see where this goes.

thnx I'll hopefully be updating again soon
I'm really glad you like it

Returning the favor of your comment on my stories :]
Thought i'd take all look at yours.
I go to say it's really good. :]

It's fine. I like the update. Very nice. Very odd that she was kidnapped by someone who she knew in college.... Hope for more soon!! ^^