I loved this chapter. It was nice to get into Carlotta's head for a spin. Dying to know what she's hiding from her friends! Keep up the good work! Can't wait for more!
Hmm, quite the set up we've got going here. There's plenty of direction for these three characters to go. :) You're doing a nice job with the three character split and keeping the story line progressing at the same time. This was very well done.
I can see there's a lot of drama coming up. Great pacing. Excellent flow between the points of view and keeping that consistent overall. I'm curious what will be coming in the next update.
:) Well then, we're getting some conflict between friends, and tension between the main character and the love interest. I can say I'm excited for more
I will say the pace of this story is coming along nicely. Plenty of backstory coming into play for the main characters as well. I'd say the brainstorming of this chapter definitely helped with getting a very clear picture of the scene cause it was pretty awesome being able to see it played out like a movie, great job!
Loving this story! Can't wait for another update. I did find a few typos here and there but nothing big. Love the story line so far and can't wait for more! keep on keeping on! You rock!