Iron and Ivory - Comments

I honestly think posting everything is a brilliant idea. :) And with that in mind, I'm feeling slightly disjointed by this chapter considering that I'm thinking in your first chapter Flannery was becoming a part of Coulson's team, and now we're here... Still I look forward to seeing how point A meets point B.

Awe! I feel special! Thanks for posting this so soon. I had a quick break at work before I get ready to get off, so I read this. I think it's pretty exciting. I love how you're going off book with this. I think I was ready to scream for sky when I read "Your future." and the door opens. :) You've got me hooked.

Number One: I am in love with your layout. It's absolutely perfect. I love those colors and the banner gives it such a lonesome feel. Which I automatically get that vibe from your character.

Moving onto number 2: That mysterious nightmare scene was a good way to start. I like being kept hanging on things like that. However, I think you could've added more detail to the little things you described to get your readers' hearts racing a bit faster. I think you have something interesting with this, I just don't think you're wording it so that it appears to us as it appears in your head. (Does that make sense?)

I just recently got back into Agents of Shield, and Tony Stark is my alter ego most days, so I'm interested in hearing more about this. If you don't plan on continuing it, that's cool too, but I'd still love to hear your plans for it.