Unique Animals - Comments

  • alprmax

    alprmax (100)

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    Thank you so much for telling me. I'll go back and fix all my problems as soon as I can.
    February 17th, 2016 at 10:57pm
  • native language

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    This is a very intriguing start! Your use of shorter sentences really helps to build up that uncertainty and suspense. The last sentence really gives me the impression that something significant is going to take place later on. Perhaps it would have been interesting to know more about how the character initially felt as a wolf, but that's just me nitpicking! Very Happy

    I caught a couple of typos:

    a animal's body - an animal's body
    the it felt – then it felt
    few thing – few things
    paniced - panicked
    scence of smell where – sense of smell were
    Everything a animal can – every time an animal came
    February 17th, 2016 at 09:52pm