March 25th, 2016 at 06:09am
The summary is really eerie, and I'm not surprised to see that it's for Guilty Until Proven Innocent. Your soft layout brings attention to the banner, which matches perfectly with the title!
With very few words you manage to very realistically set up college life, and instill the terror in me that one must feel when being attacked. I rather enjoyed this, despite the short length, because it seems so realistic and is pure detail. You've set up an amazing story here! And I absolutely adore the name "Lennox" for the main character - this, for some reason, strikes me as a name that would be in the media often; I can see Lennox's name in headlines, part of a high profile abduction (or even murder) case. Names have never seemed so important to a story until my reading of this.
There's one small bit, where I'm not sure if it's a typo or if more clarification is needed: when he felt - she?
I've subscribed~ Can't wait for more of this
I really really hate that I’m in love with your summary. It’s so heinous and disturbing and so perfect for this contest. I like it mainly because it basically gives me an overview of what character I will read and learn about.
I’m intrigued by the character you created. Her character and her thoughts comes off realistic and three-dimensional. The descriptions you used were phenomenal, especially “his voice sounding small but there was a force behind it that made her shudder.” This painfully sticked to me once I read it. I read it twice, you know. I also freaking hate that I’m just sitting here when I could hypothetically help her. Yooo, you’re making me go insane, as if I’m watching an episode of Criminal Minds
Grace’s intentions were sooooo innocent (from what we know right now….oh what if…..TWISTS). She’s the type of best friend everyone should have~ someone there to make you try new things and test new boundaries. Ugh, I hope she helps find Lennox. Or does something about Len.
I’ve got so many questions running in my head
How did this guy snatch her???? Gah, it was isolated, wasn’t it?
Why her??? …..he was probably watching her every move and just thought “hey, she’s perfect”
HE IS DOING THIS TO FULFIL SOME SICK MOTIVE OF HIS
omg, i just answered my own questions ^ lol
I am so ready for the next chapter
and I agree with Midna the Dark, don't separate from your friends (dr reid )
Your writing is straight up beautiful and mesmerizing. Your descriptions were one-hundred percent perfect and full of the main character’s emotion. I always thoughts your writing is one of the best on here so there’s no disappoint when I read this. Fantastic job, Lizz!