Johnny and Kaci's relationship is goals. It's so adorable and perfect but entirely realistic at the same time, I could definitely see a relationship like this happening in real life and I love that. The fact that Johnny was so dense about what her shirt meant was hilarious, I love that it just took him so long to figure out. And the fact that he knew he was being dense was so great.
I thought everything you wrote flowed really well together. You had a really nice balance between dialogue and description and it felt super natural to read.
One thing I noticed: She'd barely given Johnny a change to set the bags down before she'd launched herself at him, "Change" should be "chance".
Johnny and Kaci's relationship is goals. It's so adorable and perfect but entirely realistic at the same time, I could definitely see a relationship like this happening in real life and I love that. The fact that Johnny was so dense about what her shirt meant was hilarious, I love that it just took him so long to figure out. And the fact that he knew he was being dense was so great.
I thought everything you wrote flowed really well together. You had a really nice balance between dialogue and description and it felt super natural to read.
One thing I noticed:
She'd barely given Johnny a change to set the bags down before she'd launched herself at him,
"Change" should be "chance".
Other than that, fantastic job!