June 17th, 2016 at 05:34am
I really think this story could be turned into an amazing novel and some publishing company should get on that
Your writing style is perfect for this type of story. I absolutely love how you wrote Cevin, she just seems so calm with everything that's going on which I think is really interesting and dark and really highlights how strong her character is. AND THE COMMENT ABOUT WOMEN NOT GETTING CREDIT. Gah I loved it so much.
Your descriptions were so wonderful and the interactions between the characters were so great. I loved where you ended the chapter, though like I said, I would love to read this as an entire novel.
Adore what you did with the prompt, great job!
The only thing really unclear is how long she's been in the cell. I was surprised that they both how their robes at the same time. I assumed she'd been there for awhile and was waiting trial or sentencing or something.
I think the concept is really interesting and clear. It took me a second at the end to comprehend how many lives she had left, but I'm glad it's not explained anymore than that. It leaves a nice air of mystery surrounding her.
The only thing I would add is letting us know how long she's been in that cell. And maybe descriptions of the two main characters, but otherwise this is a really interesting piece! :)