Bittersweet Are the Milestones - Comments

I love your writing style. Your imagery and metaphors are just so well-executed. I love how you describe everything. Paragraph five has to be my favorite part.

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The white autumn sun is fading and it descends into the horizon like a giant monarch sinking into a frothy bath after a long day. The air smells like fresh rain. It stings the tip of my nose and numbs my hands.

This gives out the image of a cold night without you having to outright tell the readers about it. You have a way with words and it's amazing to see how you create a picture through your writing. I absolutely adore it!

I remember when I was 14. I had this weird hatred towards boys in general which is funny when I think about it now.

Reading the journey of her relationship with Connor just makes me feel things. The ending is so powerful I feel like something is squeezing at my heart with a wrench.

All in all, this is a very beautifully written piece. Good luck in you future stories!

This is a beautiful one-shot. You're character has a strong voice and this story is relatable to many people. You are a very talented writer. Please keep up the good work I can't wait to read more of your writing :)